Module 1 — Effective
writing: Strategies
and principles
| Course Guide | Module 1 | Module 2a | Module 2b |
Activity 20: Avoiding discriminatory language
Rewrite the following sentences, in more appropriate language.
Sentence 1 |
A doctor will be hired to help probationers evaluate cases and he will be expected to conduct training also. |
Your sentence |
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A doctor will be hired to help probationers evaluate cases and he or she will also be expected to conduct training. Or simply: A doctor will be hired to help probationers evaluate cases and to conduct training. |
Sentence 2 |
If a supervisor dresses well, he presents a positive image to his subordinates. |
Your sentence |
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If supervisors dress well, they present a positive image to their subordinates. |
Sentence 3 |
The patients were brought into the interview room and heard their case notes read aloud by an attractive young woman. |
Your sentence |
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The patients were brought into the interview room to hear their case notes read. |
Sentence 4 |
Although he is confined to a wheelchair, my colleague is able to work in this office because it is designed to accommodate the disabled. |
Your sentence |
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My colleague is able to work here because the office is designed to be wheelchair-accessible. |